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Many students are choosing not to study science in universities.what are the causes for that.what are the effects of that

Though we're in a technology age, many
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 believe studying science-related subjects will lead to an increase in stress,lack of free time and so on.
Art
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courses
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 connect with the creative part of the human brain. On the other ,hand studies have proven that many
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 tend to study
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 because
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 has to do with self-expression,you expressing yourself through your imagination.
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, when seeing an
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 painting you can tell a story just by looking at the strokes of the brushes,the colours being used and so on Being born into a computer age, where
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-related
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 in the university have little to no importance, a lot of
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 have decided not to study science-related
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 in the university.
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 is because many
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 believe science-related subjects need a lot of work, which really isn't the case. For ,example many
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 believe engaging in science subjects will lead to an increase in stress,lack of free time ,and most
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 have a stereotypical belief that math is difficult.  
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 may be a result of the mode of teaching . There's a high rate of mental breakdown in university
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 , which is
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 of bombarding
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 with a lot of
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 and home activities .
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 changing
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 from science to
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 because of stress which has played a major role in their mental state.

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