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Many students are choosing not to study science in universities.what are the causes for that.what are the effects of that

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Though we're in a technology age, many
students
 believe studying science-related subjects will lead to an increase in stress,lack of free time and so on.
Art
courses
 connect with the creative part of the human brain. On the other ,hand studies have proven that many
students
 tend to study
art
courses
 because
art
 has to do with self-expression,you expressing yourself through your imagination.
For instance
, when seeing an
art
 painting you can tell a story just by looking at the strokes of the brushes,the colours being used and so on Being born into a computer age, where
art
-related
courses
 in the university have little to no importance, a lot of
students
 have decided not to study science-related
courses
 in the university.
This
 is because many
students
 believe science-related subjects need a lot of work, which really isn't the case. For ,example many
students
 believe engaging in science subjects will lead to an increase in stress,lack of free time ,and most
students
 have a stereotypical belief that math is difficult.  
Although
 I believe,
this
 may be a result of the mode of teaching . There's a high rate of mental breakdown in university
students
 , which is
as a result
 of bombarding
students
 with a lot of
schools
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 and home activities .
For instance
 , studies have proven that there's a higher rate of
students
 changing
courses
 from science to
art
courses
 because of stress which has played a major role in their mental state.
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