The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.

The graphs below show the numbers of male and female workers in 1975 and 1995 in several employment sectors of the Republic of Freedonia.
The charts give more information about showing of men and women
employee
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in 1975 and 1995 in some
catagories
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categories
of the Republic of Freedonia.
Firstly
,to start with
first
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table.
This
pointer is about
1975
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the 1975
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index. We can see that
,
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maximum
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the maximum
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showing was
infroduced
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introduced
with almost 850 employees in men in
public
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the public
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sector
(non-
defence
).
In contrast
,
minimum
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the minimum
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statiatic
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statistic
statistics
was appreciated with almost 30
workers
in
public
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the public
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sector
(
defence
)
in
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a woman
the woman
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woman
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women
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.Generally,
top
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the top
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index in
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a woman
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woman
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women
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is equal
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630.A small number of man
workers
is equal
almost
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210 in
public
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the public
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sector
(defend)
On the other hand
,
second
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chart is about 1995 showing.Most of all
was
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estimated almost 850 male
workers
in
public
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the public
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sector
(
non
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non-defence
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defence
),
in addition
,at least showing
was
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were
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approximately 101 woman
workers
in public
sector
defence
. The
stafistic
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statistic
statistics
of Manufacturing and communication level each other
may be
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maybe
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300 male and female
workers
respectively.
To sum up
,both 1975 and 1995 year high rate belonged to
public
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the public
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sector
(without
defence
).On top of that at least
number
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a number
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was illustrated in
public
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the public
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sector
,
however
the showing
waa
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was
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better in 1995 than
1975
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in 1975
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.
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