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the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and women of different employment status.

#amount #leisure #time #men #women #employment #status
The diagram gives more information about the number of free time to get pleasure
both
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for both
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 females and
males
of
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in
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 various employment situations.
This
statistic
 illustrates 5 categories 1998-1999. We can see,generally, a high rate belonged unemployed
males
 with 85
hours
 in a
week
, on the one hand,retired
males
 are more close.
In contrast
, the minimum pointer was appreciated with almost 38
hours
 in a
week
 and
this
statistic
 occurred in employed in full time.
In addition
, unemployed women and retired women level off with approximately 78
hours
 in a
week
.On top of
that
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 there aren't employed
males
 in part-
timetime
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time time
 and housewives. They're between at least
statistic
 is equal 40
hours
. Index of housewives equalled 50
hours
.
Finally
, employed in
full-
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the full-timetime
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timetime
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time time
 index was introduced with approximately 43
hours
 in a
week
. Taking everything into consideration, the best
statistic
 belonged
unemployed
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males
 than the others.As well, the worst number happened in employed females in full time
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