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Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Every year many
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 in the world do not exist. Some individuals believe that life will be less difficult if
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 of
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 exist.
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 essay agrees with the statement because
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allow
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people
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 to explore other individuals and will allow them to work at any workplace.
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, more residents can know a wide range of
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 from different backgrounds.
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 to, say because cultural and social difference matters a lot. Most
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people
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 can have a common mode of speaking and can express themselves freely.
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, it
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give
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 them an opportunity to overcome the language barriers. Presently, due to more
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languages
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people
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 feel uncomfortable
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 themselves freely.
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, fewer
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 will solve that problem.
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,
Spanish
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 language is extensively spoken by speakers worldwide.
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, more citizens express themselves without any hesitation in other countries.
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, it allows the speaker to work in any job environment without any issue. It has been said because more companies tend to communicate
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 one or two
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.
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, it becomes
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 to easy for employees to speak with a large number of co-workers or
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.
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, English is mainly used by
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international firms to recruit workers in the company. As a consequence, more candidates apply because they are comfortable with English. In conclusion, residents are privileged to talk with a huge number of individuals.
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,
people
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 around the world get to work in more jobs friendly environment without major issues.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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