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Cultural tourism, in which people travel in order to visit museums, monuments and archaeological sites among other things, is a growing industry. Having so many visitors may sometimes benefit a nation's cultural heritage, but it can also cause problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Tourism has become one of the major sectors of income for a majority of the countries. There has been an upsurge in the number of
people
 visiting museums, monuments and archaeological sites of historic importance. Some
people
 argue that
this
 increase in the numbers benefits the country's heritage, while others contend that
this
 has more disadvantages. I completely agree with the latter viewpoint and
this
 essay will elucidate reasons to support it. On the one hand, it is essential to know about the country's cultural and traditional values and these visits will provide us insight into
this
 knowledge.
Moreover
, it gives us information about important personnel who have contributed to history.
For instance
, in India, visiting a museum that portrays knowledge about the freedom fighters and their struggles for attaining independence.
Consequently
, visual information has a great impact on individuals rather than reading books.
On the other hand
, I believe that rather than benefiting the nation's heritage, these have a plethora of cons.
Firstly
, increased human interactions will damage these valuable assets.
Also
, once damaged, it is difficult to rebuild these cultural monuments,
hence
 the destructions will become irreplaceable. To illustrate, due to the prolonged human intervention and pollution, the Taj Mahal, India's greatest wonder is on the verge of deterioration.
Secondly
, some places may lose their cultural value.
This
 is mostly applicable to religious places. As the area will become a tourist location, more hotels and other facilities will make the place less attractive.
Consequently
, these unnecessary developments will impact its historical importance. To conclude, even though, visiting historic places provide us with knowledge about the country's culture, it can bring more problems by damaging the sites and
also
 losing their importance.
Hence
, it is always beneficial to restrict the number of
people
 visiting these sites and at the same time encouraging
people
 to respect them.
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