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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and production and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people buy local products?

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Nowadays,
people
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 prefer buying the
products
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 of large companies which spends a big sum of money on marketing and production. In
this
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 behaviour as well ways to encourage
people
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 to buy locally produced goods. As companies increase in size and produce more, they
acheive
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achieve
 economies of scale.
As a result
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, they are able to compete in the market by offering low prices.
In addition
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, they spend a lot of money on marketing and promotion, which induce
people
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 to buy more of their
products
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.
This
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 causes a major problem.
People
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 are discouraged to buy locally produced
products
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, which can destroy the local economy.
For example
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, Egypt is famous
by
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for
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 producing
high quality
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high-quality
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 cotton.
However
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, the
garment
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 industry is
sufferring
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suffering
 because of the intense competition from Chinese
garment
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 companies, as they offer very low prices compared with the Chinese alternative.
Consequently
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, Egypt is now exporting the majority of its cotton production as a raw material.
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,
this
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 deprives the
enomony
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economy
from
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 the
value added
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value-added
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 impact of
manufaturing
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manufacturing
 and selling the final product. There are some strategies to overcome that.
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, Egypt's government can encourage investments in
garment
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 manufacturing by giving incentives to local investors,
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, by reducing taxes for
this
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 sector.
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,
garment
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 manufacturers can produce
high end
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high-end
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products
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 with
the
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high quality
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high-quality
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 cotton locally grown, to appeal to
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affluent consumers.
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, the government can encourage small and medium businesses in
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 sector by providing them
low interest
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low-interest
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 loans. In conclusion, price competition from big corporations is fierce, and consumers are lured by low
procies
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prices
proxies
 which can kill local industries.
However
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, several
startegies
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strategies
 can be made to induce consumers to buy local
products
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.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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