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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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Children often fill their leisure time to play, either traditional sport or technology-based business. Is it true that kids having the opportunity to access high-tech game devices will get a multitude of benefits? Some
community
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 claim that computerized
games
 might be detrimental for young age groups. I personally believe that the negative impacts of electronic
games
 outweigh the positive effects for the following reasons.
First
 of all, psychology experts consider that elementary
school
 students who have accessed to a Play Station and used more than
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half of their day to play are tend to have a myriad of issues regarding their mental health.
In other words
, the Xbox is very deleterious for young people psychological development.
For instance
, when a 7 years old prefer to connect with
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 game after his class over, they will only focus to their gadget screen and do not deem to be aware what other people do in
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.
This
 kind of activity might absorb their energy so much.
As a result
, they experience
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, depression or anxiety, particularly if they stop to detach
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 their computer before they win the competition. Another point to consider is the more youngster enjoy their match while playing
a
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games
, the greater their desire to access it and ignore to do their homework.
This
 is because they feel no longer attach
in
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school
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 as their game tools are more attractive comparing to books and academic lessons.
Moreover
, not many parents
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conscious
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with
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this
 current situation.
Therefore
, when their daughter or son
come
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 home from
school
, they assume that their juvenile will
strightly
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slightly
straightly
 go to their study room to conduct the
school
 works. Meanwhile, what
young
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 generation
need
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 is
entertaintment
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entertainment
 and relaxation after the busy schedule and a boring learning system. In conclusion,
although
 many
society
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believe
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 that
games
 have positive impacts
to
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on
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 children
mental-health
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mental health
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 and do not have any influence
to
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 their
education
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 performance, I still consider that the drawbacks outweigh
benefits
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 as the technology-based
games
 disturb kids mental well-being and interfere
their
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 focus
to
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 schooling process.
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