Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small and local businesses are unable to compete.Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Globalisation and industrialisation brought
a
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immense change in
business
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businesses

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like
supermarkets
expansion. Some
people
believe that it is the existence of local communities. According to my point of ,
view
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it's not totally disappearing of locals market but
supermarkets
are affecting somehow the local shops.
First
of all,
people
are having lack of time because of their tight schedule so they gave much preference to buy anything from
supermarkets
rather than any local shop.
Furthermore
,
supermarkets
lure their customers by giving a lot of
scheme
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schemes

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like buy one ,get one or a lot more so public run behind desperately these kinds of schemes.
Moreover
,
supermarkets
are combined
of
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a lot of other services like cinema,food courts and playroom
consequently
this
is a great beneficial part of any business when
people
can not stop them to go and buy another beyond benefits. In local ,businesses
people
have a limited stock not having varieties as
supermarkets
are having so
that is
another reason when
supermarkets
are running great rather than local businesses. In conclusion, overall it can be observed that
supermarkets
are the
first
priority in
people
's choice but it doesn't mean that local communities are dying. It can say that they are
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but not existent.
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