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Some people think that hobbies should be linked with technology, while others believes that it is not necessary for hobbies to be involved with technology. Discuss what is your opinion? Give reasons for your answer and give relevant examples from your experience.

#people #hobbies #technology
In today's
world
, it is believed by some part of the population that hobbies should be somehow related to
technologies
 while others disagree with
this
 opinion. I think that
this
 statement is incorrect and a give
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essay
 will discuss possible evidence for
this
.
First
 of all,
to begin
 with, the
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 reason why a given idea is false is that all people are different and everyone's preferences differ.
This
 is because oft
he
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 fact that not do hobbies mean something
that is
pleasent
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pleasant
pleasing
 for a person and is considered to be a joyful pastime but
also
 not all humans are interested in
technologies
.
Therefore
, if not everyone is capable to cope with
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gadgets
gadget
this
 does not mean that they are forced to do it against their desire.
For example
, recent research has
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 that only 2% of all human beings are genuinely fond of technological development.
Moreover
, another cause why it is not essential to have a hobby linked to technology is that in
this
 case there will be no variety in
this
world
 and no
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creativity
.
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This
 is due to the fact that not only will all people concentrate on
technologies
 but
also
 there will be
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 artistic humans and those who prefer different activities.
Hence
,
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it
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it may
 lead to a period of stasis if
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the technological
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technological
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 aspect of the
world
 will be developing while others will remain the same.
For instance
, scientists claim that not only understanding of
technologies
 is valuable in a modern
world
 since without art and creativity nothing would be developed. Eventually, to conclude, in my
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 hobbies do not
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have
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to
 be linked to
technologies
 since,
firstly
, not everyone is eager to learn them and,
secondly
, other spheres and disciplines are equally important for
this
world
.
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