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“Some people believe that the violence shown in movies and video games has a damaging effect on society. While others believe that these don’t have an influence on people’s behaviour. What is your opinion?” After reading the question, the first step would be,

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Nowadays, with the rise in
violence
 and
crime
 all around us, some people believe that the
violence
 shown in movies and
video
 games has an influence, while others believe that it doesn’t. I believe that
media
violence
 does not have that much of an effect on the rising
crime
 in society.
Firstly
,
although
 I agree that the rate of
crime
 and
violence
 around us has increased lately, I don’t think we can blame
the
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media
violence
 for that. I am sure any responsible citizen who watches a movie or plays a
video
 game with
violence
 in it, is aware that it is there only for the sake of entertainment. That being said, in any case, if any individual does cause harm to his society, it would have to be due to his character or his circumstance. So in my opinion, a reasonable and conscious person would not cause harm to others, regardless of what he sees in any form of
media
.
Moreover
, movies and
video
 games actually provide escapism into a virtual world where people can relax and release their anxiety. After a long day at work, when someone comes back home and watches a movie or plays a
video
 game, they automatically forget about all their worries and tensions and recover from the frustration they may have. Personally, I enjoy playing
video
 games as soon as I get back home from work.
Finally
, despite some people believing
otherwise
, I don’t believe that the
violence
 shown in the
media
 plays a role in a person’s character or in the increase of
the
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violence
 and
crime
 in our society. In fact, the content in the movies and videos can actually help in reducing the frustration and stress factor.
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