Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Ohter argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

As far as
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am concerned there is always going to be bad situations in life,
nevertheless
, we can take
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the
action to make something to change that
situation
in order to get something better that we deserve if we work hard for it. when
people
doesnt
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doesn't
complain about a bad
situation
they are accepting it, and not trying to do anything, for my personal point of view
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will always be the person who
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to improve its
situation
as far as
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can. because its easy for some
people
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their comfort zone, being comfortable and not try their best , and
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am totally
desagree
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disagree
with
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that person
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people
i
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do
prefer
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see
people
which always get what they want because they try hard and they want to improve their
situation
something
that is
totally admirable and all of us must try to do, because at the end of the story that
people
is the one who is
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successful
and make whatever they want because of their hard effort, enterprising
people
which never gives up, so
finally
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would say that
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prefer to be that kind of
people
who always look forward and try their best. and
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don't
get me wrong, of
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that
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respect
people
who accept the bad situations in the way as it comes to their lives
,
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because that
people
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an advantage which is to keep calm in any bad
situation
that comes, and
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that's
great too! So briefly
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that's
that
my perception.
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