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Some people think that inorder to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicle should be barred in city centres while others consider this to be an realistic solution.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #inorder #congestion #cities #vehicle #city #centres
Overcrowding in the cities is a major problem which the
society
 feel that,for a permanent solution to be met,
privately
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 owned
automobile
 should be barricaded from
city
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the city
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 centre while others contemplate
this
 to be
impracticle
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impractical
 solution.In
this
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i
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 will elaborate
both
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 views and provide my opinion
Firstly
,overcrowding in cities is a major problem globally,
thus
,one of the
solution
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 among many others
is barricade
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is barricaded
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 privately owned
automobile
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.
In addition
,it is certain that less carbon
emmission
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emission
emissions
 would tremendously reduce,which is contributing heavily towards climate change.
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 the
society
 would benefit from reduced heavy traffic
jam
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.
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,the country of Rwanda barricaded all privately owned
automobile
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automobiles
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 in the city which has contributed towards the country being listed as
top
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 most country that has reduced pollution by 60%
Therefore
,barricading
private owned
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automobile
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automobiles
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 will bring satisfaction in the
society
 and a smash hit toward
healthy
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society
Secondly
,it is impractical to
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the bare
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bare
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bear
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private owned
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automobile
 as commuting will take longer
thus
 it will challenging in areas with poor public transport.Indeed there will be overcrowding in public transport terminals.
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,a survey done by
ministry
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 of transport shows that 90% of people would lead to time trouble
without
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this
 type of
automobile
.
Therefore
,
this
 will bring about
lack
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 of efficiency in our daily activity. In conclusion,for the sake of the health safety in the
society
,which is
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most
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 contributed by climate change brought about by pollution,it will be crucial to barricade private
automobile
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automobiles
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 from cities.The disadvantages can be managed without so
much
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 consequences especially time factors.
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