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One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion. What do you think the causes are? What solutions can you suggest?

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Nowadays, traffic congestion has become a major issue experienced in every urbanized city. One common reason for
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 problem is the lack of public
transportation
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 methods and their poor operating quality.
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, people compel to use personal vehicles over a bus on daily basis for their convenience. The road traffic has been increased rapidly in the
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 few years due to the majority of cities still operate a limited number of traditional public
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 methods
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 as buses and trains
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 it operates under minimum conditions. Sri Lanka experiences huge congestion all over the roads in Colombo city limits throughout the daytime. Due to buses are hardly operated on time and the quality in buses and trains are lack
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 as not sufficient comfy seats or majority have been damaged, the garbage can be found on the floors even on the seats.
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, people are reluctant to use those in their daily operations. As a solution, the government should pay extra attention to improve the public
transportation
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 services by allocating a high budget to introduce new methods
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 as railbuses, express trains, or boat services.
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, in Japan, it has been declared crucial to maintain a continuous qualitative service that should be clean and comfortable for passengers. Being punctual is
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 a vital scenario in Japan since they apologize even when one minute delay occurs and
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 they have an advanced reservations system so that passengers can experience a
hassle free
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on time
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 ride. In
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, It is obvious that people prefer personal vehicles due to the poor management of public
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 and it leads to huge traffic congestions.
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, considering to improve the quality and punctuality of the public transportations by the government will provide a solution to reduce these congestions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urban population
  • public transportation
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure
  • economic strength
  • consumerism
  • car ownership
  • commuting
  • peak hours
  • public transit
  • carpooling
  • ride-sharing
  • remote work
  • flexible working hours
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion charges
  • traffic management systems
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