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School should concentrate on teaching students the academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Subjects such as music and sports are not useful. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#school #students #subjects #future #careers #music #sports
Some people believe that teaching academic
subjects
 should be the principal
aproach
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approach
 of schools to prepare
students
 for better jobs in their future, while alternative
subjects
such
 as music and
sports
 are considered as wasting time. Personally, I think that both types of
subjects
 could be practical, and I
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therefore
 disagree with the statement that music and
sports
 are not useful
subjects
. On the one hand, alternative courses could sometimes be helpful for future careers.
For example
, learning how to sing or play a musical instrument could bring benefits for
students
 in networking events or having job promotions. My cousin once told me about his experience when he got a promotion as a marketing manager for his talent and bravery because he volunteered to perform a show at his company event for clients. Another course that I find helpful and essential
is
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sports
. In my opinion,
sports
 could bring benefits to
students
 because they help them to improve their strength to work under pressure or they could expand their professional network by playing
sports
 with their colleagues or partners.
On the other hand
, schools should teach
students
 academic
subjects
 because they will help them to pursue their dreams
on
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professional
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area
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. If
students
 want to be scientists or biologists, they need to have basic knowledge of academic
subjects
such
 as mathematics, geography, biology, which should be taught at school before enrolling in universities or going to work. In my case, it took me around one year to study basic knowledge of
Probality
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Probability
 and Mathematical Statistics at
highschool
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 for pursuing my dream job as a
Maket
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Market
 Researcher at university. In conclusion, academic
subjects
 are essential for
students
, but
subjects
such
 as music and
sports
 could be equally practical and helpful for different circumstance
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