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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think this is a good or bad Idea?

#students #move #country #studies #idea
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The figures represent the
number
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 of owned
vehicles
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 per
thousand
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 people in China between 1987 and 1999
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, inclusive.
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, the bar chart shows an upward progression;
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, the rate of increase varies significantly
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 the individual
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years
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year
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 period. Turning to details, the smallest
number
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 of
cars
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 per
thousand
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 was in 1987 which amounted to considerably less than 500. The
number
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 of
vehicles
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was rising
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 gradually from 1987 to 1991 and became twice as many (just under 1000) as it was in the beginning.
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, the changes in
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cars
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car numbers
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number
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 were insignificant for the next
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 and remained approximately the same;
additionally
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, it almost reached 1000.
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, by 1995, the
number
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 of
vehicles
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 doubled (about 2000) in comparison with the previous time. It started uplifting rapidly;
in addition
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, the
number
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 of
cars
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 in the next
years
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 accounted for just below 3000 and by 1999 it increased by almost 2000 (reached just above 4000). The figures represent the
number
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 of owned
vehicles
Use synonyms
 per
thousand
Use synonyms
 people in China between 1987 and 1999
years
Use synonyms
, inclusive.
Overall
Linking Words
, the bar chart shows an upward progression;
additionally
Linking Words
, the rate of increase varies significantly
according to
Linking Words
 the individual
Use synonyms
years
Fix the agreement mistake
year
show examples
 period. Turning to details, the smallest
number
Use synonyms
 of
cars
Use synonyms
 per
thousand
Use synonyms
 was in 1987 which amounted to considerably less than 500. The
number
Use synonyms
 of
vehicles
Use synonyms
was rising
Wrong verb form
rose
show examples
 gradually from 1987 to 1991 and became twice as many (just under 1000) as it was in the beginning.
However
Linking Words
, the changes in
Use synonyms
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car numbers
show examples
number
Use synonyms
 were insignificant for the next
years
Use synonyms
 and remained approximately the same;
additionally
Linking Words
, it almost reached 1000.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, by 1995, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
vehicles
Use synonyms
 doubled (about 2000) in comparison with the previous time. It started uplifting rapidly;
in addition
Linking Words
, the
number
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 of
cars
Use synonyms
 in the next
years
Use synonyms
 accounted for just below 3000 and by 1999 it increased by almost 2000 (reached just above 4000). The figures represent the
number
Use synonyms
 of owned
vehicles
Use synonyms
 per
thousand
Use synonyms
 people in China between 1987 and 1999
years
Use synonyms
, inclusive.
Overall
Linking Words
, the bar chart shows an upward progression;
additionally
Linking Words
, the rate of increase varies significantly
according to
Linking Words
 the individual
Use synonyms
years
Fix the agreement mistake
year
show examples
 period. Turning to details, the smallest
number
Use synonyms
 of
cars
Use synonyms
 per
thousand
Use synonyms
 was in 1987 which amounted to considerably less than 500. The
number
Use synonyms
 of
vehicles
Use synonyms
was rising
Wrong verb form
rose
show examples
 gradually from 1987 to 1991 and became twice as many (just under 1000) as it was in the beginning.
However
Linking Words
, the changes in
Use synonyms
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car numbers
show examples
number
Use synonyms
 were insignificant for the next
years
Use synonyms
 and remained approximately the same;
additionally
Linking Words
, it almost reached 1000.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, by 1995, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
vehicles
Use synonyms
 doubled (about 2000) in comparison with the previous time. It started uplifting rapidly;
in addition
Linking Words
, the
number
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 of
cars
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 in the next
years
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 accounted for just below 3000 and by 1999 it increased by almost 2000 (reached just above 4000).
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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