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Today, more and more students are deciding to move to another country for their studies. Do you think this is a good or bad Idea?

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The figures represent the
number
 of owned
vehicles
 per
thousand
 people in China between 1987 and 1999
years
, inclusive.
Overall
, the bar chart shows an upward progression;
additionally
, the rate of increase varies significantly
according to
 the individual
years
Fix the agreement mistake
year
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 period. Turning to details, the smallest
number
 of
cars
 per
thousand
 was in 1987 which amounted to considerably less than 500. The
number
 of
vehicles
was rising
Wrong verb form
rose
show examples
 gradually from 1987 to 1991 and became twice as many (just under 1000) as it was in the beginning.
However
, the changes in
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car numbers
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number
 were insignificant for the next
years
 and remained approximately the same;
additionally
, it almost reached 1000.
Furthermore
, by 1995, the
number
 of
vehicles
 doubled (about 2000) in comparison with the previous time. It started uplifting rapidly;
in addition
, the
number
 of
cars
 in the next
years
 accounted for just below 3000 and by 1999 it increased by almost 2000 (reached just above 4000). The figures represent the
number
 of owned
vehicles
 per
thousand
 people in China between 1987 and 1999
years
, inclusive.
Overall
, the bar chart shows an upward progression;
additionally
, the rate of increase varies significantly
according to
 the individual
years
Fix the agreement mistake
year
show examples
 period. Turning to details, the smallest
number
 of
cars
 per
thousand
 was in 1987 which amounted to considerably less than 500. The
number
 of
vehicles
was rising
Wrong verb form
rose
show examples
 gradually from 1987 to 1991 and became twice as many (just under 1000) as it was in the beginning.
However
, the changes in
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car numbers
show examples
number
 were insignificant for the next
years
 and remained approximately the same;
additionally
, it almost reached 1000.
Furthermore
, by 1995, the
number
 of
vehicles
 doubled (about 2000) in comparison with the previous time. It started uplifting rapidly;
in addition
, the
number
 of
cars
 in the next
years
 accounted for just below 3000 and by 1999 it increased by almost 2000 (reached just above 4000). The figures represent the
number
 of owned
vehicles
 per
thousand
 people in China between 1987 and 1999
years
, inclusive.
Overall
, the bar chart shows an upward progression;
additionally
, the rate of increase varies significantly
according to
 the individual
years
Fix the agreement mistake
year
show examples
 period. Turning to details, the smallest
number
 of
cars
 per
thousand
 was in 1987 which amounted to considerably less than 500. The
number
 of
vehicles
was rising
Wrong verb form
rose
show examples
 gradually from 1987 to 1991 and became twice as many (just under 1000) as it was in the beginning.
However
, the changes in
cars
Fix the agreement mistake
car numbers
show examples
number
 were insignificant for the next
years
 and remained approximately the same;
additionally
, it almost reached 1000.
Furthermore
, by 1995, the
number
 of
vehicles
 doubled (about 2000) in comparison with the previous time. It started uplifting rapidly;
in addition
, the
number
 of
cars
 in the next
years
 accounted for just below 3000 and by 1999 it increased by almost 2000 (reached just above 4000).
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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