Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

In our societies, some people believed that there is an existence of The One that
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our
lives
. They might say that it is best for us to agree to receive an unlucky condition like
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job or
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of wages; He would be the reason
of
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all of our possessions and decisions that we have for now.
On the other hand
, some people argue that we must give some efforts in every challenging
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,
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because we as a human have a responsibility to strive for our
lives
. I might agree with the latter as it could make us some improvement in every
situation
in our
lives
. We all acknowledge that we might not
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all
what
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we want; we always have a limit in our desires.
In addition
, there might be The Great that
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every
events
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happened. Believing on
this
notion, some people, usually called Jabariyyah in term of Islamic thought, agree that we have to accept every
situation
that The
God
give to us: bad or good.
In other words
, they might argue that humans are controlled by predestination, without having choice or free will. They believe that it could give us,
thus
, a peaceful condition in every
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in our
lives
.
On the contrary
, others, usually called Qadariyyah, believe that we have to struggle for our
lives
, no matter what
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God
give to us. Our fortunes,
in addition
, are determined by our efforts. They might argue that
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God
would not change our fate but we have to try even only a little. While they still believe that intervention of The
God
is exist
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,
this
perspective could obviously give us
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hope to improve our
lives
in any
situation
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happened
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. To conclude, I strongly believe that we have to give the best efforts every time, so we could lead the way we take as
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God
do some rest for us.
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