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The goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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Materialism and consumerism have inevitably led us to the high
production
 of materials and goods. Some people believe that high
production
 should be every
country
's goal. I partially agree with
this
 thinking because
this
development
 has some positive and negative points. On the one hand, increasing
production
 can provide us with many benefits.
Firstly
, high
production
 needs a high workforce.
This
 means the employment rate would meet a rise.
For example
, in many countries, a majority of people rely on
production
 units for employment. An increase in the
production
 of goods provides a
country
 with a higher employment rate.
Secondly
, a
country
 can export materials to other countries provided surplus
production
. Exporting plays a major role in a
country
's economy.
Therefore
, the rise in manufacturing can provide substantial support to a
country
's
development
.
On the other hand
, there are some problems that increasing
production
 brings along.
First
 and foremost, to meet the high
production
 standards, producers compromise with quality. Market these days is full of
such
 low-quality products.
Secondly
, the surplus availability of a good may lead to value degradation. Sometimes
such
development
 can cause some consequences which may affect the market.
That is
 why high
production
 should not be the highest concern of a nation. To conclude, a
country
 should think thoroughly about
such
 goals because they are very crucial for a
country
's overall
development
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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