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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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 increasing over the years, and with that, there is an urge to create more space to accommodate the bolster in family numbers. The option of constructing in the countryside sounds
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, it is not the only option. In
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 essay I will go through some pros and cons, to demonstrate why it is not ideal. The construction of new houses in the countryside is being discussed by governments that
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 no space left to shelter
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 number of residents. New York City, namely, have succeeded in expanding their households to surroundings and has half of the population based on its edges, where is possible to experience the balance amid city and nature, which has been proven to be an excellent switch. Even though there are benefits
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 building in the countryside, it is impossible to ignore its disadvantages, which can go far beyond. When we tear down any piece of nature to replace it with our own “needs” the human race
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 being extinguished as a consequence. Nature has an enormous influence
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 all living creatures and even if we consider that and try to do as
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 dwindling became the biggest portion until it is forgotten the initial intention. In my opinion, not just for the stunning views, but for the essence of humanity we need to understand the importance of protecting farmlands and find plausible alternatives to convey the growth in population in regards
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 their needs.
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 more apartments and even skyscrapers could be a better option when compared to ruin green areas.
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