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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is believed that several people have chosen to
work
 for themselves by setting up their own
business
instead
 of choosing to
work
 for a
company
 or industry. The reasons why
this
 has been occurring and the drawbacks will be presented in
this
 essay. Broadly speaking, we live in an extremely competitive world, where people´s intention is not only to be professionally
succesfull
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successful
 but
also
 to have a better life in terms of finance. It is known that in certain regions of a country, working for somebody means, being a blue-collar worker, receive orders, obey the boss,
work
 hard in order to make some money to pay the bills. By opening their own
business
, people tend to believe that their dream of living in a better condition may come true. The advantages of being an entrepreneur are that
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 the person is able to conduct his
business
 the way he desires,
consequently
, the possibility of having more free time to dedicate to the family is higher,
furthermore
, there is no boss to argue with the person all the time due to the fact that he is the one who commands the
company
.
On the other hand
, some drawbacks must be warned, depending on the kind of
business
 which is opened, it may demand extra hours of
work
 in order to make it grow or to attend the necessities of the clients. Another counterpart is that employers must be hired and the possibilities of having
work
-related problems with them are real.
Also
, If the
business
 owner fails in conducting the
company
, he may bankrupt and have to find
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 to start all over again. To conclude, opening your own
company
 is not that simple, I can comment about it due to the fact that I have already tried to open my own store and thought that I would have more free time to spend with my family, but
instead
, I had to
work
 overtime and worse, the mission of increasing substantially my income has not been achieved yet.
Thus
, a
recommedation
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recommendation
 that I would make is, think about the advantages and disadvantages before deciding what to do.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employment
  • freelancing
  • entrepreneurship
  • autonomy
  • financial stability
  • work-life balance
  • financial insecurity
  • lack of support
  • resources
  • long working hours
  • uncertain income
  • job security
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