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the number of employees and factories in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901.write anything

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The table gives some data about the amount of
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male and female workers and
factories
 in England and Wales from 1851 to 1901. Overall, the show of the male and female workers was dropping dramatically from 1851 to1901 and
this
 situation can affect the general number.
In addition
, the number of
factories
 decreased (the
last
 decade). With regards to men and women, the high rate of the statistic was illustrated in 1851 with 287100,
also
this
 situation happened in the female employees with 190000. The minimum index occurred in 1901
both
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 male and female employees ( 31000 and 30000 respectively). The index of the female workers in 1871 was twice as much
than
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 in
1901
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 year. In terms of the total employees and
factories
, the pointers of
factories
 both 1851 and 1861 years were relatively similar,
nevertheless
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 the minimum number belonged to 1851 with 225, the same situation was pointed out in 1871 and 1891 years (622 and 625 respectively). The maximum show was shown with 721
factories
 in 1881.
Finally
, the top level of the total show happened in 1851 just above 477000,
in
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 the least occurred in 1901 with 61000
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