The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays
technology
has taken over almost all ordinary activities whereby, for shopping, it is a click on the computer button and all your shopping will be delivered at home. Nevertheless
, this
is a worrying trend to numerous shops
in town and cities as the
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they
may be
phased off.
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maybe
To begin
with, technology
has several merits and demerits, even though; we have no option but to adapt to the system. Various global countries technology
was adapted way long ago hence
, facilitated development including in remote areas .For, example online being
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is
has
brought along employment to 50% of students who graduates. In, addition Change the verb form
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this
sort of business is cheaper since one do
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does
lastly
reach masses of people
online unlike physical shops
. For this
reason, there is a possibility that, in few
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a few
decade
to come, there will be very minimal physical Change to a plural noun
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shops
available since the
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society
is adapting to the technology
of online shopping.
Secondly
, despite the agitation of physical shops
being faced out, they can still advertise online and have physical
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a physical
point
of collection for their customers. Fix the agreement mistake
points
Hence
shops
will still remain crucial as some customer
will still require to see the item or even compare with other items physically before making a decision to reimburse. In, addition due to increased cases of conning, Fix the agreement mistake
customers
shops
are still very crucial. For, example research was done by University
of Nairobi shows that 40% of Correct article usage
the University
people
in the
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society
still do not trust online shopping. For, this
reason shops
are still very important in the
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society
as there people
taking advantage of online shoppers to shoplift capital from them.
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technology
has changed the normal way of doing things including shopping which is adding value to several people
in the
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society
.Therefore
interest of
online shopping is growing at a speedy rate.Change preposition
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