Art is essential part of all cultures throughout the world however in these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus on science technology and business

Art
is
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part of cultural heritage and represents individual and express the nation's characteristics. But
people
's interest in
art
is getting lesser and lesser owing to lack of job prospects and
lean to
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science, technology and business. Government can tackle
this
problem
is
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in
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association
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an association
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with
public
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the public
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.
Firstly
,
People
consider
art
as
hobby
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a hobby
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that we do in our spare time to entertain ourselves or we do to relieve our work stress.
Secondly
, you can secure
good
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a good
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job in multinational companies with decent pay after studying
in
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science, technology and business.
On the other hand
, many artists struggle for their livelihood as compared to those employed in business and technology.
Moreover
, Getting
education
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an education
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in these subjects are perceived as
gateway
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the gateway
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of
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success.
For example
,
the
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time magazine has conducted a survey that shows science graduates have better job opportunities than
art
graduates
Art
is
backbone
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the backbone
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of every country if attention will not
given
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in
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to
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this
sector, it can vanish from our country.
Thus
, Authorities should allocate funds to build new
art
schools and maintain
art
galleries to revive
art
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the art
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.
In addition
, they can hold cultural events that will attract the
tourists
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tourist's
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attention and create jobs for artists and will generate revenue to boost up
economy
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the economy
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. If reasonable
people
are given to artists, they will start focusing on
art
and can pursue his career as
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an artist
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artist
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artists
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. To conclude,
art
is
showcase
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a showcase
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of our culture, history and history that can not be ignored because it will make more
people
unemployed. Government should take good steps for its revival.
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