The air pollution is becoming serious problem it is solely responsibility of our governments to reduce air pollution. Do you agree or disagree?

Air
pollution which is caused by some
significiant
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significant
reasons is one of the most serious problems in our globe. The main cause
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lead
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to
air
pollution come from
natural
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which is difficult to change.
In particular
, methane is emitted from the production, transport of coal, natural gas and oil. Methane emissions
also
result from livestock and other
agricutural
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agricultural
practises
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. Another example to explain
for
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that
,
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when a volcano erupts, it explodes and sends smoke into the sky which
create
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unhealthy
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atmosphere. Human activities
aslo
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also
bring a lot of harmful factors to the quality of
air
. The number of industrial manufactories is increasing to do not decrease the
amout
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amount
of smoke
thoughtout
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throughout
the years.
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, a large number of vehicles
aslo
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also
emit fumes which lead to
reduce
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the quality of
global
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atmosphere. To sum up, natural and human activities are
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main causes lead to
air
pollution.
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