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The air pollution is becoming serious problem it is solely responsibility of our governments to reduce air pollution. Do you agree or disagree?

#air #pollution #responsibility #governments
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Air
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 pollution which is caused by some
significiant
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significant
 reasons is one of the most serious problems in our globe. The main cause
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that lead
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lead
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 to
air
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 pollution come from
natural
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nature
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 which is difficult to change.
In particular
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, methane is emitted from the production, transport of coal, natural gas and oil. Methane emissions
also
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 result from livestock and other
agricutural
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agricultural
practises
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practices
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. Another example to explain
for
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that
,
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 when a volcano erupts, it explodes and sends smoke into the sky which
create
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unhealthy
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 atmosphere. Human activities
aslo
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also
 bring a lot of harmful factors to the quality of
air
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. The number of industrial manufactories is increasing to do not decrease the
amout
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amount
 of smoke
thoughtout
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throughout
 the years.
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, a large number of vehicles
aslo
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also
 emit fumes which lead to
reduce
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reducing
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 the quality of
global
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the global
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 atmosphere. To sum up, natural and human activities are
two
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the two
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 main causes lead to
air
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 pollution.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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