The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the main reasons workers chose to work from home and the hours males and females worked at home for the year 2019.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates why employees decided to work from
home
,
while
the table
give
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information about the proportion of
men
and
women
worked
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who worked
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weekly from
home
in three duration (under 10
hours
, 10 to 30
hours
and over 30
hours
) in 2019.
Overall
, the most significant incentive for working at
home
for both
men
and
women
was
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were
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saving money.
Women
asserted productivity as the least important factor, compared to easier childcare for
men
. Most
of
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men
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the men
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worked remotely from
home
for over 30
hours
,
while
the majority of
women
at most used
this
option for under 10
hours
.
To begin
, most
men
and
women
preferred working from
home
to save money at 45% and 42%.
While
26%
women
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of women
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chose to work from
home
because of their children, only 4% of
men
argued the same reason.
However
, 24% of
men
said that they could promote productivity by working from
home
, compared to 11% of
women
with the same cause.
On the other hand
, the proportion of
men
who worked under 10
hours
from
home
was 3%,
whereas
74% of
women
had less than 10
hours
work
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of work
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.
While
81%
men
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of men
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worked over 30
hours
,
this
percentage for
women
is less than
one tenth
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one-tenth
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(at 6%). The category of 10 to 30
hours
was in the middle for
men
and
women
at 16% and 22%, respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words home, men, women, hours with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • commute
  • flexible schedule
  • family responsibilities
  • gender roles
  • professional duties
  • societal trends
  • economic responsibility
  • home-working hours
  • traditional roles
  • male-dominated industries
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