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Do you believe that experimentation on animals for scientific purposes is justified? Are there any alternatives to animal experimentation?

#experimentation #animals #purposes #alternatives
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It is believed to be a controversy whether scientific
experimentations
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 on animals are immoral or not.
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 essay will evaluate both sides to the topic as well as my opinion and alternatives. Even
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though
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tough
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 animal testings are providing
the
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information of a drug
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 or not be used by humans,
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 strongly believe that
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 method is inherently unethical and must never be used in the nearest future. It is
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 necessary to acknowledge that there are, indeed, some results of
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 approach. Due to the similarity between human and animals tissues, carrying out these experiments may give a clear understanding of the level of a drug's development.
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, luckily, a decreasing number of makeup companies are testing their produce on creatures in order to obtain information of some allergies or other reactions it may cause in people.
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, it means that the same adverse reactions, which are obviously damaging, are seen of former creatures.
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,
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growing popularity may lead to a decline of the population of the species and
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, crash a natural cycle. Fortunately, modern technology enabled scientists to come up with alternatives
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 do not harm anyone included. Recently they found a way to copy human as well as animal cells.
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, testing various products on them would be quicker and
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. To conclude, animal experimentations are not justified in any way.
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, because these methods put the species of Earth at the risk. And due to
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 of alternative variants, they are
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 unnecessary. My opinion is the same. These
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 are cruel and immoral in relation to the creatures.
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