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Some believe that training is necessary to be a good teacher, others think that teachers don’t need a training course. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

#believe #teacher #teachers #don’t #course
It is considered by some that
latest
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 residential property must be constructed in the traditional styles, While there are others who think that local authorities should permit
people
 to select their own choice of design for their
homes
. In my opinion,
people
 should be offered both choices of construction. On the one hand, new
homes
 with old looks conserve arts and traditions. Needless to say that
people
 want to protect their
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practiced
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 culture and ideas through these architectural
design
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designs
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.
Although
 there are other ways to protect these customs and practices
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people
 are more emotionally attached to these arts and
therefore
 they adore these old fashion styles.
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 in
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 19th
century
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people
 lived in
houses
 with large
backyard
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 and temples inside
it
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.
On the other hand
, new
homes
 with
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 architectural design provide some form of contentment.
Although
house
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 is one of the basic necessities of life.
Modern
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 style of
houses
have
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 become common nowadays. Undoubtedly every person dreams of a luxury apartment or a villa to reside in. With the passage of time and
money
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people
 require customisation in their
homes
 to match the different
level
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levels
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 of needs. A good example of
this
 can be seen in metro cities where car parking has become a major problem and
people
 have basement parking lots.
Finally
, in my
opinion
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people
 who wish to safeguard their ancestral traditions should erect their new
houses
 in an
old style
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 especially in rural areas and
people
 who have a robust desire to have
modern
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a modern
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 layout in their concrete structure must seek permission from the designated authorities to give their house a new look. In conclusion, old beliefs can live longer from ancient structures whereas modern
structure
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structures
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 play a vital role when it comes to
beauty
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the beauty
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 of the
houses
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pedagogical skills
  • Classroom management
  • Effective communication
  • Educational techniques
  • Student engagement
  • Natural talent
  • Subject mastery
  • Formal training
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Real-life teaching scenarios
  • Adaptability
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Financial and time burdens
  • Continuous professional development
  • Evolving educational environments
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