lt is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that апу child сап Ье taught to become а good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is a belief that some
people
are born with
talent
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the talent
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to excel
in particular
fields like music or games but some do not.
Nevertheless
, it is said that the
child
can be taught to be a musician or a sports person with
right
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motivation and
guidence
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guidance
. In the essay, both views of these two contrasting statements will be discussed.
Firstly
, It is claimed that
people
are born with talent, sometimes it can be true. There are some
people
who are good at a
profression
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profession
professional
right from the beginning. It may be
heridatory
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hereditary
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effects
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the
child
powers. To be clear the
child
can inherit certain qualities from parents. A singer's son can become a musician or can
atleast
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at least
have sweet vocals.
However
, it can
also
happen in
this
way, the
child
can be inspired by their
parents
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parent's
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profession and start developing
interest
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an interest
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to pursue that career. When we look at some great musicians,
sports persons
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sportspersons
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or actors, they have shown considerable efforts from childhood.
This
can be
advantage
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for those
people
to excel in certain careers.
On the other hand
,
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practice
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makes
man
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a man
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perfect. Some
people
can achieve success through
practise
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and training. Anything and everything can be achieved with
hardwork
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hard work
and determination. When children were given support and encouraged in the area of their interest they can be successful.
People
can learn and develop skills under
right
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guidence
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guidance
and
perseverence
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perseverance
. Many musicians and sportspersons are produced by the training academies every year and
this
can be seen as
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example for
this
. All in all,
People
can be born with certain abilities to become a singer or sportsperson, while some can be successful in these fields by having professional training and
aslo
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also
passion towards the goal. In my
opinion
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everything will be possible
,
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if one
have
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determination towards the goal.
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