According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average 'holiday' is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want exitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or disagree?

The nature of
holidays
are
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changing tremendously over the years. These days,
people
are more inclined towards trying new and challenging
activities
. I am in
favor
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for
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of
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trying new
activities
on
holidays
but on
certain
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a certain
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limit. It is rightly said that amount of fertilizers decide the growth of any tree, the same way, anything
done
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in moderation is more acceptable and safe. There has been
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an increase
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increase
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in unusual
activities
done by the tourists
such
as paragliding, parasailing,
snorkling
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snorkelling
,
squba
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scuba
squab
-diving, bungee jumping, and many other
tasks
. The rates of these
activities
are very high, though
people
prefer experiencing
it
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them
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. These days,
people
have
tendency
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a tendency
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to do something different and upload
on
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it on
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social media
immediatedly
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immediately
.
People
have become more active during
holidays
than in their normal routine. It is observed that
people
feel more
enthusiast
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and energetic after doing
such
activities
.
This
eventually brings positivity among individuals. The change experienced by
people
by doing these
activities
lead to
change
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a change
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in their mood. They usually have a tendency to think in
such
a manner that creating memories by exploring different
tasks
and collecting them will give them
motivation
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to pass their normal routine life.
Therefore
, these days scenario of
holidays
are
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is
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changing.
However
, there are
other school
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another school
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of participants too who think that it is not very safe to do challenging
activities
. They prefer to be safe and relax during their
holidays
. They
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believe
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belive
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believe
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not to take
risk
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risks
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of
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their life to do these
tasks
.
Instead
, they favour enjoying nature and explore
different
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a different
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culture
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cultures
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.
Moreover
, these
activities
cost
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costs
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are high and not everybody can afford to do so.
Therefore
, there
are
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is
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mixture
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a mixture
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of
people
who are in
favor
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favour
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of doing challenging
activities
. To conclude, I am more inclined towards doing these
tasks
but in moderation.
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