Today, more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficlult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antartica. What are benefits or disadvantages for tourists visiting such places?

There are lots of
places
that
people
can visit there in the world.Some
people
prefer visiting
places
that are hard
reach
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such
as the Agrı mountain while others choose to visit spaces that are accessible and relaxing like the Maldives.Nowadays,according to research,there is a rapid increase in the number of tourists who prefer the holiday destination which is difficult to reach. The advantage of
visiting
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the visiting
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area
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areas
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where conditions is that discover unknown species of animals or plants.There were found many animal types by experts but there are so many that cannot be found.For
this
reason,when foreign
people
go to the Sahara desert or
the
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Antartica
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Antarctica
Antarctic
, they will see wild animals and plants they have never seen before and take photos to keep them
in
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the moment.Maybe those plants they found could be good for
a
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disease.
On the other hand
,there is
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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of visiting
such
places
.
Places
like
this
can be dangerous to human life because they are difficult to capacity and often do not make phone calls.
For instance
, if
a
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individual lost her way, she cannot find the team members because of connection.
Therefore
,that person can spend the night outside alone, hungry and without water. The risk of death may increase
as a result
.Psychological disorders may occur in the future, even if it is found alive.
That is
why
,
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many
people
do not want to go
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that
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those
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areas. In
cocnlusion
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conclusion
, sometimes visiting areas where conditions
is
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useful but
sometims
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sometimes
it can be dangerous.
nevertheless
, adventurous kind of travel puts
people
into
the
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atrocious danger but
also
made them adventurer on someone else.If a person trusts herself, she may visits there.
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