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Nowadays people living in large cities face problems inn their daily lives. What are these problems ? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller towns ?

Daily living of public residing in bigger
cities
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, is full of challenges, like dealing with
traffic
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 congestion and
long distance
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long-distance
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 travel.
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 essay agrees that the authorities should make
people
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shift
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 to their native smaller towns, and will discuss
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further
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 along with major
issues
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 of public.
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, metropolitan
cities
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 attract
people
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 because of better job options ad other facilities, they have to deal with
plethora
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a plethora
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 of
issues
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 as well, in major one being the
traffic
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 congestion. No matter how good the infrastructure be, there is always
traffic
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 jams
especially
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 during peak office hours.
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, there is pollution in the major
cities
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as a result
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 of more motor vehicles on the roads, especially during winters.
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New
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 Delhi government passed orders for commuters to use
less
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fewer
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 private cars to deal with pollution,
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 creating
further
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problem
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problems
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to
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for
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 office goers.
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this
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,
people
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 staying here
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 face relationship
issue
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issues
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 due to lack of
time
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 for kids and family as major
time
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 is spent while travelling to
office
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the office
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 because most of the offices are in the
center
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centre
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 of the city and
people
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 mostly have
residence
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a residence
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 at the other corner of the city. To deal with
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issues
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,
government
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the government
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 should definitely motivate
people
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 to
shift
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 to the smaller
cities
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 by offering more jobs in and similar facilities there. Authorities can ask organisations to
shift
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 their offices, better schools will
also
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shift
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.
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, will suffice the purpose of moving. If
given
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option
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the option
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,
people
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 will be happy to stay
I
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in
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 smaller towns, where daily life is much easier.
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,
people
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 can have more spare
time
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, due to lesser distance to travel, and can spend their evenings with family and kids. To conclude, there are
lot
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 of consequences of staying in metropolitan
cities
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 like
traffic
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issues
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, pollution and lesser quality
time
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.
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,
ministry
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the ministry
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 should interfere and provide better jobs and facilities to motivate
public
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the public
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 in order to
shift
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 to smaller
cities
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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