Big salary is much important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is a
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controversy
among standard criteria for
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choosing
a profession. Most
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candidates
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are selecting a vacant position with high
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and competitive packages. Personally, I strongly disagree that the income would be the main reason when applying for
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ocupation
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occupation
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of all, I believe that
people
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have to earn enough amount of
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for their monthly expenses.
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, we need to pay our bills
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goods, fuel, electricity, school fee, food, etc.
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, many
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set a goal for job satisfaction that no
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can
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guarantee
. They can struggle
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their
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daily basis due to the short of
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,
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graduated students and start-up
entrenpreneurs
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entrepreneurs
are well known for chasing their dreams, but that does not always give them sufficient
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to support their own family and
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comfort
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life. That's why it is more crucial to choose the kind of work that makes you happy than to look on at high earning.
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, doing what you like keeps you motivated and
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leads to a
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career
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ladders growth.
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, there is a great bond between productivity and staff 's interests.
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who love their job can
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achieve
a better outcome than those, who put salary
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the
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place.
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, workplace culture and environment
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affected the
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level of happiness and life 's standard.
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, there are some
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who devote their
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charity because they love to help others and contribute to the community. In conclusion, I totally believe that other principles are more
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beneficial
than
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amount of income. Because
money
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can not buy happiness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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