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Some people think students should study the science of food and how to prepare it. Others think that school time should be used in learning important subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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It has been suggested that topic for discussion, more people believe that students must be taught the
subject
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 of
food
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 and preparing rules. The others argue that students should learn the dispensable
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 in the
school
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time
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. We will pay attention to both sides of the argument.
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children
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 get data
how
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 to prepare
food
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 as a
subject
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? As a matter of fact, some illnesses are being created by
food
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 like fatty, inactivity, because the majority of both the young and parents or others don'
t
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 know more
information
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 about the
food
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, their composition so they can'
t
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 explain more things to
children
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. In fact, hazardous drinks, foods, their composition will be known by
children
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. Briefly, I believe strongly
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 idea isn'
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 negative for
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. Let us take a look at the
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 opinion,
children
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 are to be taught more essential, decisive
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 like geometry, maths and so on. As far as I know, some people claim that the
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 isn'
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 enough for
children
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 getting
information
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 about lessons so
children
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 needn'
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 have extra
information
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. As an example, the
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 of
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 the
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 ought to be separated for crucial lessons by
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 or teachers. In fact, some parents believe that they have got data about everything and
children
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 can be explained by parents more things.
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, I must admit that
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 can'
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 be shared better by
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 for necessary
subjects
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however
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 I don'
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 agree that the science of
food
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 isn'
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 important. My personal view on
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 matter, the science of
food
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 mustn'
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 study as a
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, but they must have got
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 on
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 matter. As a measure, it is necessary to be realized by
school
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 or teachers as seminars or lessons seldom. Weighing up both sides of the argument, students had better study crucial
subjects
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 for the future, on the one
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 the data must be taught to
children
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 about
food
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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