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It is usually foolish to get married before completing your studies and getting established in a good job. Do you agree or disagree?

#studies #job
(It is true that .)
While
 some people tend towards the viewpoint that , I would have to support the idea that . On the one hand, there are clear arguments that . One of the main reasons can be that .
This
 means that . Another reason can be that .
For example
,
On the other hand
, I agree with the viewpoint that .
Firstly
, I believe that .
This
 is because (
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,) .
Secondly
, I
also
 feel that In conclusion, it seems to me that
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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