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The provided illustration explains how electricity is produced through geothermal energy. Overall, it can be depicted that there
are
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five major equipment utilised to produce
power
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the power
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they are a container to store cold
water
, the injection well, the production well,
condenser
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a condenser
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and a generator attached with a turbine. As the diagram explains, the
first
three steps involved in producing electricity are based on
underground
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the underground
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process.
Firstly
the stored cold
water
is pumped down 4.5 kilometres with the help of the injection well and as the
water
passes through the geothermal zone the hot rocks convert the cold
water
into hot
water
which is
then
pumped up with the help of the production well.
Secondly
, the hot
water
is
then
condensed in the condenser and the steam released out of it makes the turbine rotate.
Lastly
, the rotation of the turbine provides power to the generator and
as a
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electricity is produced in the tower.
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