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Nowadays, many people think that we should live with climate change instead of preventing it. Do you agree or not?

#people #climate #change
The melting glaciers , forest
fire
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 or frequent floods are
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a sign
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sign
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 of rapid change in climatic
condition
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 around the world . There is a school of thought who thinks we should live with
this
 climate change
instead
 of preventing it. To , fuel
this
 idea it is
belived
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believed
believe
 that
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, climate change is part and parcel of earth history . It is evident
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form
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 past data that after
particular
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 interval there arise extreme heat or cold on earth.
This
 is well illustrated ,how dinosaurs extinct after major fire break on earth.
Secondly
, the balance of climate is disturbed and our efforts to repair it is very small. Example The large construction of dams in name of development has sunken the water source from glaciers .The dams were built to provide water and electricity for the world but the glaciers melted in
construction
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 of building it . I agree
to
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 the aforementioned rubric,as humans we have hardly put
efforts
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for
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 other living organisms
which
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co existed
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 with us. Like, it
being
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 said that only 14% of sea creatures are known to
world
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.
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 of waiting time in mending nature. The nature has power to self repair itself.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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