Most people believe that stricter punishment should be given for traffic offences.To what extent do you agree.

It
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if
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often argued that there must be heavier
fine
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and
penalty
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penalties
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for those who breach the
traffic
rules. I am strongly in
favor
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of supporting the idea. it is seen that some of the
drivers
use bus special lines to avoid the
traffic
,
furthermore
, car horn has a huge impact on the people's hearing organ.
First
and foremost, the current punishment for offensive
drivers
is not enough.
Therefore
, there must
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change in the current law enforcement. there are
drivers
who use public
transport specific
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lanes to overcome the
traffic
and get to the destination faster which lead to
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other
drivers
and
also
the nations who use
bus
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to travel.
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, according to the
lastes
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latest
Bloomberg Road news, 60% of the
drivers
who follow other vehicle's lanes had been getting the fine notice for the
second
time due to the fact that the amount of penalty is very affordable.
On the other hand
, during
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traffic
on the
road
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there
are
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wheelsman
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who keep
preesing
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pressing
the horn button and make so
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unnecessery
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unnecessary
noises
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noise
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.
rise
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in noise pollution is the result of the mentioned misconduct.
For Instance
, research in Japan
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that 70% of citizens who
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Receiving Nerve Disability (RND) are living in the city
center
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which is connected to four big highways and
12
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hours
traffic
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a day. In conclusion, I absolutely agree with the opinion of increasing the
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for those who do not obey the rules of
traffic
. disobey the guides often lead to have a bad influence on their peers and
also
put the people's physical health at risk.
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