In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

It is becoming common nowadays for the elderly to go and live in nursing homes where they will get extra care. Due to the demand, these
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with high
cost
on maintaining the institutions, as medical
cost
deemed to be high currently. In Britain especially, most of the time, the
cost
is being managed
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taxpayer’s money. I personally feel that it is unfair to the
government
on bearing the
cost
, where the family will
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involvement in it. Certain people tend to be burdened whenever they need to provide care for the
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in the family. They tend to look at it as an extra chore
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takes out precious time from them. It is these which leads them to send their elderly loved ones to
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home so that they do not have to worry about them. While not worrying, they need to be aware
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the
cost
implications which will occur when they utilize the service from the care
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, and not solely depend on the
government
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needs to ensure that there is a proper process in place to audit the nursing home residents, where it details
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the family background and income level. The data should help the authorities to determine whether monetary assistance is needed, and they can
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it
accordingly
to low, middle, and high-income groups.
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will enable the
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on their annual budget.
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is currently done in Malaysia where targeted subsidies
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given based on income group. In conclusion, I believe those who can afford the services of nursing homes should do their due diligence in paying the bills and let the
government
grant go to those who
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in need.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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