Some people believe today that everyone has a right to access to the Internet and that governments should provide this access for free. Other people believe that access to the internet is not a right and should be paid for like other services. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In the 21st century, the technology like
internet
extensively
using
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by
people
. in which one group of
people
ponder that the facility of
internet
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the internet
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should be free in manner while another group opinion that everyone should
change
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charge
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an entrance fee for the
service
. in
this
essay, I will explain both views and will summarise my opinion regarding
this
statement.
Firstly
,
free
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facility is more applicable for developing and underdeveloped countries because the
people
over there cannot afford
this
service
which
make
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a sense of disparities among them.
secondly
, it is more accurate for more than education that every
students
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learning
through
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online which make a
government
initiative for free access.
for example
, due to
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the corona
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corona virus
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coronavirus
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schools and public libraries are shut down, whereas the children learn their lessons through Google meet.
in addition
, many developing countries
government
precedes free mobile
internet
facilities for their children to continue their studies.
Thirdly
, we can instruct online shopping, marketing, business strategies for meeting expenses so
government
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introduction
free
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net fastly not only enhance education but
also
helps to meet the dreams of many
people
in our society. Apparently, giving a free
service
is not an easy task it needs more infrastructure and money.
consequently
, poor countries need to meet mobile
service
, mobile application, officials and policies for imparting these
service
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services
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.
In addition
, it arises a question for paying services and it
mobilize
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a helping hand for the authorities to reduce their debt. Admittedly, the
people
now spending more time
in
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on
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internet
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the internet
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for leisure activities or other unnecessary things which brings
government
regulation of
service
through paying extra money. to illustrate
this
,
Government
of India now charging extra fund for video game companies because youngsters now addicted these games and spending more time
in
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internet
in order to regulate
this
, correctional methods applied by controlling authorities. In conclusion, we want technology to meet the needs of modern life but charging for
this
service
should be on the basis of
financial
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background of
people
.
otherwise
, it makes a huge difference between the life of rich and poor
people
. it is high time that
,
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government insured
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internet
service
for all its
citizen
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citizens
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, as they are the future of the nation.
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