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In many countries, the number of animals and plants is declining. Why do you think this is happening? How can this issue be solved?

#countries #animals #plants
The biological life cycle is very important for the extinction of the world, and any changes that happen to it may have a wide impact on everyone's survival. Nowadays, around the
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 many flora and fauna are getting distinct due to various reasons. Through
this
 essay, I will explain the major reasons for
this
 and provide solutions to resolve
this
 issue. Natural habitat is very important for every
animals
 and
plants
 existence, but in many
countries
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 people exploit it drastically. Individuals and corporates convert forests into agriculture, residential or commercial land for their business profits and because of
this
 process it damages many
plants
 as well as numerous
animals
 livelihood.
Additionally
,
this
 process can cause global warming, flooding, desertification, etc. and which, can reduce the number of various species.
For instance
, Panda's and Rhino's distinction happened due to deforestation. Protecting natural habitat is the primary option to
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protect
animals
 and
plants
 from getting
distincted
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distracted
. Governments and people's have a major role in it, governments should create and enforce stright policies and regulations for converting forests for residential or farming purposes.
Additionally
, the government can create different awareness programs for their citizens. Parents and teachers can teach the children's about the importance of nature in their childhood.
For example
, parents can support their children's to
plants
 trees and grow pets, due to
this
 activity, when they grow up they are aware of the importance of
plants
 and
animals
 and they will not destroy that. In conclusion, as explained above, there are numerous reasons for the distinction of many
animals
 and
plants
. With the strict policies and awareness to the public from Governments as well
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 support of responsible people
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 issues can be resolved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • urbanization
  • deforestation
  • agricultural expansion
  • pollution control
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable practices
  • overexploitation
  • invasive species
  • conservation
  • quarantine measures
  • eradication programs
  • public awareness campaigns
  • habitat destruction
  • climate change
  • natural habitats
  • species decline
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