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the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

#uk #commuters #car #bus #train
The graph gives some data about the average amount of UK travellers every day with various transport
such
 as car,
bus
,
train
 from 1970 to 2030. Overall, the high rate belonged to the car using compared to the
bus
 and
train
 utilisation, on top of that the index of the car using fluctuated.
Finally
, the pointer of the
bus
 tapered off slightly. With regards to the
bus
, the minimum show was appreciated with just under 6
million
commuters
 in 1970,
in
contrast
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 the high
number
 was shown in 2030 with approximately 9
million
 people. In terms of the
bus
 and
train
,
commuters
' maximum show was introduced in 2030 with just above 3
million
 travellers,
on the
contrary
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 most of all were shown just under 3
million
 people in 1970 in the
train
 pointer. The
number
 of
bus
commuters
number
 dropped from just over 3
million
 to almost 3 between 1970 and 2030.
Finally
, the
train
commuters
number
 levelled off in from 2000 to 2010 with 3
million
.
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