Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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for
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term will lead them to comfort and success in
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, yet remain community had another point of views that great opportunities provoke to think out of the box by mean change current job
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and apply to another company to
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fulfil
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their
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opinion and how it may involve in their future pace.
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public of their
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about changing your current
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for better
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achievement
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about staying in
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same
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forever.
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of all, I
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what people
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demand
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pressure and to be able to gain money to purchase what they demand.
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unfortunately
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hard at his
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he
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his best to stable and improve his productivity based on what tasks he owned to company, but remain at
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job for around 5 to 10 years will involve him
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serious physical or mental health issues which
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of; 1) Being disillusionment to his future, Remain in the same worker without
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discipline
a new experience. 2) Dealing with
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similar
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routine
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and bordem. 3) Feel insecurity at
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especially for being an old worker and provide
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objective
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to complete without any increment or increase in
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bounce
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, when remain public said it is essential to search for
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job it does not mean they are obsolete regard what they said, but
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prospective
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perspective
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will help any
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person
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to get through right decision, new
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style to provoke via new features ,
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as; He will be willing to obtain
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position
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within
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from where he applied.
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discipline
into new kind of tasks which will allow him to be more essential at
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but not least, provoke through respect, duo to the potential
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background
that you
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nailed
from previous organizations. To sum up, it is
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the essence
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to
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in
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, yet when you find yourself didn`t
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receive
good value for being an employee
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directly move forward and
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search
searched
for new opportunities in
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. In my opinion,
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kind of decision is a bit tough, because it is based on a person himself
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either to stay at
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or to apply for new positions, but
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just
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tremind
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remind
yourself that
life
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is short and anyone should
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acknowledge
knowledge
about what path they are dealing with.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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