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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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Well, as far as my opinion related to the
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tourism
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 50 years. I think
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it's
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necessory
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necessary
 for any country whose economy
based
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 on the
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tourism
, cause it can
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 a massive
impact
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 on
economy
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. But,unfortunately in some
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 peoples use
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tourism
 places like
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trash or their own regular street where they used to take advantage of their citizenship to
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create
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creat
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create
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 a mess around them, like some of them explain
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 opinion regarding the trash producing activities that if they don't do so,
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 how it will be possible for those persons who used to generates their amount by
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picking up
 those trash items. But
on the other hand
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, local people of the
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tourism
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 mostly complaining about
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those types of
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tourist
tourists
 who cause a negative
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 on their
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.
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 year I went to the
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northern
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areas
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 of
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 for the winter trip, and it was one of the arduous
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 of my life. The hosting people were charging very high for the
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accommodation
 over there
becuase
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because
 if they ask less amount for the rent so it will be easy for any kind of person to stay over their places. So, the reason for their asking rate too high was that they want to give
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their
them
the
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accommodation
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 to well behave and
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 persons so they won't create a mess around it, which cause a very big
impact
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 on our budget. but we have no
ther
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other
 option unless we have to go for
a high rates
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high rates
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. But, what
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 think that the reason was very satisfied no one wants to pollute their living area
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because
 of what so ever reasons
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 unless they equally pay
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their
 taxes as compared to their high asking fairs
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which
impact
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 a
postive
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positive
 boost in the economy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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