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In some countries, the Government has tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hour. Do you think this development is positive or negative

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Undoubtedly with the increasing population globally, the commuting needs are rising, leading to
traffic
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 congestion. Some countries have tried different methods to curb
traffic
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 congestion; one is implementing
tax
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 during rush hours. I believe
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 creates a negative impact and will not solve the problem because it is challenging for
people
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 to pay for something
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 a necessity and will make a wrong impression of the Government.
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,
traveling
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 is a necessity of life, and many
people
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 prefer to use their vehicle to save time and become independent. There are different kinds of jobs where many
people
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 need to use their vehicle to reach on time, and they do not want to wait for public transport. In most parts of the world, the office hours are identical, so implementing extra
tax
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 will not stop
people
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 from using their
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.
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extra
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tax
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 will only cause an additional burden for the regular commuter who are doing nine to five jobs.
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, implementing extra
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 will decrease the ruling party's popularity and impact the
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 elections. Adding
tax
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 will not reduce the
traffic
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 during the rush hours, and
people
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 will eventually abide
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 pay the implemented
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.
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, on the same note,
people
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 will not vote for the Government party in the
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 election due to their citizen's non-friendly policies and adding extra taxes. To conclude, adding an extra
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 to reduce
traffic
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 congestion will not reduce
traffic
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;
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, adding
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 burden on
people
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 and put the ruling government vote bank at stake.
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