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In some countries, the Government has tried to reduce traffic. For instance, they imposed a congestion tax during rush hour. Do you think this development is positive or negative

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Undoubtedly with the increasing population globally, the commuting needs are rising, leading to
traffic
 congestion. Some countries have tried different methods to curb
traffic
 congestion; one is implementing
tax
 during rush hours. I believe
this
 creates a negative impact and will not solve the problem because it is challenging for
people
 to pay for something
that is
 a necessity and will make a wrong impression of the Government.
Firstly
,
traveling
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 is a necessity of life, and many
people
 prefer to use their vehicle to save time and become independent. There are different kinds of jobs where many
people
 need to use their vehicle to reach on time, and they do not want to wait for public transport. In most parts of the world, the office hours are identical, so implementing extra
tax
 will not stop
people
 from using their
motor
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motors
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.
As a result
,
extra
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tax
 will only cause an additional burden for the regular commuter who are doing nine to five jobs.
Secondly
, implementing extra
tax
 will decrease the ruling party's popularity and impact the
next
 elections. Adding
tax
 will not reduce the
traffic
 during the rush hours, and
people
 will eventually abide
and
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 pay the implemented
tax
.
However
, on the same note,
people
 will not vote for the Government party in the
next
 election due to their citizen's non-friendly policies and adding extra taxes. To conclude, adding an extra
tax
 to reduce
traffic
 congestion will not reduce
traffic
;
however
, adding
extra
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 burden on
people
 and put the ruling government vote bank at stake.
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