Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Write at least 250 words. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Climate change is one of the emphasizing
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,
that is
coming into the limelight.
This
is mainly due to the impact of growth and development of the nations on the
environment
. Few
community
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believe that
major
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contributors
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to
this
is the developed countries. Whereas, some groups opine that
everyother
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every other
counterparts
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should be held liable
towards
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the protection of the
ecosystem
. I completely standby
this
viewpoint and I will explain
this
in the following paragraph. Established countries
contributes
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upto
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up to
to
80% of pollution as compared to growing nations. The impact that it has on the
ecosystem
is gruesome.
Eventhough
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Even though
, they grow in terms of GDP, living standards and job prospects. The reverse effect that these have on mother nature is really intense.
For example
; deforestation, pollution (noise, water, air) and landfill.
This
in result leads to climate change which in return impact the economy as a whole.
Similarly
, some groups
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with the view that every other nation should be held responsible for
safegaurding
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safeguarding
the
ecosystem
. I totally go with
this
point because as an individual every other person is to be held accountable for preserving the
environment
where we live. In order to sustain it, no matter if
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developed or developing, everyone should come up with viable options to protect
the
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nature.
For instance
; India is a developing country,
still
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some of the states
contributes
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highly in terms of pollution which
effect
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affect
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the
environment
.
However
,
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government
goverment
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of India has imposed several stringent laws against the industries which pollutes the
ecosystem
. To conclude, every
nations
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has to stand by the
environment
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protection laws and should abide
to
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it
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. It is
duty
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of all the
humanbiengs
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human beings
to contribute in return something or in
way
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a way
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to be thankful
to
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the earth by sustaining it and by preserving it.
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