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Some people argue that if children behave badly their parents should accept responsibility and also punished for their behaviour of their children.Do you agree or disagree?

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Adolescent behaviour and punishment
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 becoming a controversial issue in
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 modern era. Some analysts think that
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 should take accountability for
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 , whereas others refute it. I agree up to some extent with the aforementioned rubric due to some notable reasons. I would like to present my views by diving deeper into the topic before deducing a reasonable conclusion. It is
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 that for the misbehaviour of
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,
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 only cant take the credit for their
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 discipline.They are
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 an age and they are influenced by external factors
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 as peers,social background,schools and have the tendency to make them
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behave in an abnormal way.Blaming the
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 can create more pressure on them and can create more strict restrictions which can lead to the negative psychological development of a child.
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 it will make them
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feel a lack of freedom which is very necessary at
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 of life.
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 some
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 are more aggressive and stubborn in nature and it is very difficult to control them.
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 attitude is impossible for
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 to control at certain times and they give up teaching them.
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 an age that they don't really realise the errors and their consequences.On the other ,hand
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 play a pivotal role in educating
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 disciplines to direct them on
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 right path with a positive approach.
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parents
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 have to be role
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 for
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 explaining the errors and their consequences
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 of giving strict punishment. To encapsulate, the foregoing discussion propounds the view that it has both positive and negative aspects but, I believe it depends on the parent as all
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 are different and they can assist their
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 to attitude with proper measures and guidelines.
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