Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while other think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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is the better source to stay fit, while others

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that it is enough to do everyday activities like walking and climbing stairs. Both methods can be helpful but it

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on how a person prefers to do to stay fit. On the one hand, joining

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heath

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club

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are a good and

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beneficial way to stay fit. We can learn

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by professional guides and

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easy to follow.

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, gyms and

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are more expensive so one drawback is only reached public can follow

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method to stay fit, poor people do not afford it.

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, there are many possible benefits that we can find in the

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but not in

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with the most advance and technological

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. It will help to

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all the

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of the body.

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, everyday activity is necessary for everyone like walking and climbing stairs and that definitely helps to stay fit but it is not as helpful as proper training. There are many steps we climb regularly at our home and that will not be considered as

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, and it is scientifically proved that daily

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is necessary to stay fit for everyone. What's more, we are not walking and climb at

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time regularly, sometimes we walk for ten minutes sometimes we walk for sixty minutes so, it is not in a considerable manner and to stay fit and healthy, it is important to have

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routine. In my opinion, there are many ways to stay fit and the

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everyday activities are not considered as

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exercise

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and to stay fit we should do

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and follow the same routine. In conclusion, join a

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and a

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club

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are the best way to stay fit but it is not affordable for poor people so they are not able to join these and everyday activity is necessary to stay fit but it is not an

exercise

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. I think the only

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can make people fit and healthy, if someone does not afford

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and

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club

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they should do

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at home it is the best way for everyone.

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