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Water resources around the world are falling deficient. Analyse the possible reasons and provide your suggestion ?

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In recent years,
lack
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 of
water
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 supply around the globe is
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threatening
 the livelihood of mankind, which is a serious matter to consider.
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 essay outlines some of the possible reasons and solutions to overcome the problem.
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, in urban cities, pollutions are increasing rapidly, which promotes global warming.
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 mainly contributed by the increase
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 development, transportation, and industrial activities in growing countries.
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 causes an effect
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 the climate that disrupts
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nature.
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, a person will notice that the heat is more
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 cities compared to rural areas where there are
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 cars on the road. The high temperature contributes to the drop of
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 level in reservoirs
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 reducing the supply. Governments need to start focusing on renewable sources for their energy needs which will help to maintain the ecosystem. For an instance, certain countries have targeted to fully shift on electric cars to lower
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gas emissions.
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, wastages on basic resources are seen to be another high factor
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 is causing
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 shortages. Industries
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 as microchip manufacturers heavily
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 on
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 in their manufacturing process.
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, domestic use
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 contributes to
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 amount of
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 depletion. There should be
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water
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 recycling program in every country to manage the consumptions.
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 way it will help to conserve and use it efficiently.
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water
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the water
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 recycling process should be mandatory for factories and sewage treatment plants included in every city to recycle every drop that goes down the drain. In conclusion,
water
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 is key to life, and we will need to ensure that it is being saved for the
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 generation by switching to renewable energy to help the environment and
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water
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 cautiously. We should be doing
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 sooner than later which might be too late.
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