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some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and town is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Most believe that planting
trees
 is more important than building houses, and
this
 is true as
plants
 are the major
life giving
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source
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 for human beings.
Eventhough
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Even though
 shelter is a necessity, oxygen produced by these
trees
 can not be replaced by any other means.
This
 passage will discuss
about
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these in
details
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.
Trees
 as said before provides for
majority
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 of our existence, it gives us air to breathe, food to eat and
also
 provides for our shelter in material ways. That being said,
trees
 are being removed from the face of the earth to satisfy the needs of the growing population.
Moreover
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 people in cities are too busy expanding the territories into the forest as they require more space for their own
benefits
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.
However
, modern architects have employed ways to curb
this
 problem by inculcating a practice of growing
plants
 within city limits and encouraging terrace farming. People seem to enjoy
this
leisure time
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 activity of taking care of
plants
 and tending for them. People
also
 agree with the fact that
trees
 should be
protrected
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protected
 and
development
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 of a place,
infrastructre
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infrastructure
 wise should take place around the natural habitat. Because
plants
 not only provide for us but
it
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also
 takes care of the environment and prevents various natural disasters.
Therefore
 it is of great importance to plant
trees
 to protect our habitat and
also
 to have
a
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sustainable development.
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