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many people want their country to host an international sporting event. others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits.

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Nowadays, many international sporting
events
 are held
in
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 various sites like every year.
In particular
, Japan is a host for the Olympics
in
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this
 summer. So those
believe
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who believe
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 that their
government
 host these sporting
events
 is good, whereas, others say it generates various problems rather than profits.
To begin
 with, hosting sports
events
 has three advantages.
First
 of all, the
government
 can be paid attention to
enforce
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 an event in terms of the economy after sports
events
.
For example
, well-known athletes appear
an
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 event
such
 as the Olympics or won a competition by athletes from their country, makes other regions paying attention.
Secondly
, acting competitions
such
 as football and tennis, stimulate audiences, and sometimes an athlete who recovered from a heavy accident and illness touches others by playing a sport.
Furthermore
, the quality of life would be improved
collecting
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 infrastructures
such
 as roads and stadiums.
On the other hand
, doing competitions give impacts
to
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 the
government
 because almost
of
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events
 are not effective for their economy with regard to cost. Looking more closely, collecting facilities is a negative influence
for
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 pollution. Many visitors go to a stadium to watch games, which bring about the problem of trash. It is critical for the environment, and it might improve worsening environmental issues. From these advantages and disadvantages, I would like to say that negative factors are exceeding positive impacts because the
government
 pays plenty of victims to take part in
events
 to collecting sites.
However
, it is a critical impact
for
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 them, and the environmental stages.
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