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Nowadays it is easy to apply for and be given a credit card. However, some people experience problems when they are not be able to pay their debts back. In your opinion, do the advantages of credit cards outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today in many countries everyone can have a
credit
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card
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 with using its benefits
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 as be able to buy everything one
want
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 without the need
of
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 sufficient balance, as well as, be made debts for ones to pay. From my point of view, the disadvantages of
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method
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 outweigh its advantages.
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 having a
credit
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card
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, conserves us from carrying money in our wallet and be mugged in the street or lost it and
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 assist us to buy everything we want, online, but the drawbacks hint us not to use any of them or at least use it more wisely with catching more information about its
fees
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 and headaches. One of the problems is interest payments which may cause a badly plummet for the spender who carries a balance. There are many kinds of charges in case of applying
credit
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 cards
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, transaction
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, cash advance
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 and so forth that the consumer may be fallen due to debts resulted
by
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 those mentioned
fees
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. Sometimes we want to purchase something which we
have
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 not enough money to pay for it. Having a
credit
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card
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 will help us to have that object and makes us satisfied.
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,
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 pleasure will not
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 much once we face
to
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the percentages of interests and debits that will increase the cost of the commodity and get us into trouble if we cannot pay the
fees
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 on time. It is
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 very dangerous for people who are
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a shopaholic
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shopaholic
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 and not wise enough to consume their
credit
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 through their
credit
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card
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. In conclusion, a
credit
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card
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 will cause some problems plus
its
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it's
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convenience
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 to pay money in today’s life. It seems to me, everyone who pays by using
of
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such
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 plastic
,
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 is walking on
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eggshells
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egg shells
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • financial security
  • unexpected expenses
  • rewards and incentives
  • cashback
  • airline miles
  • impulse buying
  • accumulating debt
  • high interest rates
  • minimum payments
  • credit score
  • borrowing capacity
  • reliance
  • saving habits
  • financial vulnerability
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